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My fields stretched, long and narrow
and yawned on humid afternoons
as I scratched the backs
of my old marshes.

My currents ran clear;
my only dream was to sweep the tops of seas,
to have always sunshine in my nostrils
and salt on my tongue.

You washed up into the may of my life
from some musky badlands.
Mother warned you were nothing
but common salt
not up to the standards
of my fleur de sel pedigree.

I thought to cure you,
to shake the blandness
from your desert eyes,
for you to be the vessel
to hold my deposits,
brackish and raw.

Your love came in small packages
but I stored them
to become my concentrated hoard;
a mine of bitterness.

I cannot name any one deception;
they are infinite, like grains of salt,
held close under my tongue.

I cannot return to my daily grind

All things taste of you
laced in bitterness

You have taken it all, my salt;
not even a grain
to rub this old wound.
You stole
and keep it in the cellar
of your heart
that extra
special ingredient
the seasoning of love.
©2007-2009 ~Danteholic
:icondanteholic:

Author's Comments

the promised poem

I did some research on salt mining

because the extra ingredient in all my mother's dishes was love.

Each line (pretty much) has a word to do with salt

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:iconjshay:
This poem is fucking intense. The rythmn was kind of hard to get into, but the message is loud and clear. Intense and beautiful. I love it.
:icondanteholic:
thanks! It is to be the title of my book some day...

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"Let your words be fitting".
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:iconmoejo:
all things taste of you

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:icondanteholic:
:hug:

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"Let your words be fitting".
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:iconislandjoe:
i am lovin your imagery here... and the way you use words (as always)...

the play on all things salt is mesmerising and resonates on so many levels... salt = tears, salt = seasoning, salt = whiteness, salt = harshness...

wow...

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:icondanteholic:
thanks, this one took forever to sit down and get on paper.

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"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X
:iconislandjoe:
i can imagine...

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:iconchararwen:
wow this is great! i especially love this stanza:

You washed up into the may of my life
from some musky badlands.
Mother warned you were nothing
but common salt
not up to the standards
of my fleur de sel pedigree.

"May of my life" makes perfect sense in the poem. You have so many references and I can see you did your homework in terms of salt mining :D

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"In the depths of winter, I found within me an invincible summer"
- Albert Camus

"Today well lived makes every yesterday a memory of happiness and every tomorrow a vision of hope. Look well, therefore, to this day..."
- proverb
:icondanteholic:
thanks :) Yes, I got it all off one site really, and then just looked up salt in the dictionary. Glad you liked this piece :) Thanks for the fave!

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"Let your words be fitting".
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