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It hunts me on salty days
and stings the wild flesh of memory,
insisting upon my negligence,
my lack of love for wild coconuts and
sleeping iguanas crept up upon by
the cautious feet of nostalgia.

The days of shell seeking
between rocks are
over -
grown
now by villas and resorts,
creeping down the hillside like love-vine,
choking the ocean of its play.
We went there, you and I,
on sandaled Sundays full of wind,
and discovered South America
on our wavy coast,
the trash of a far away continent
a treasure to sand dusted conquerors.  

I should have tried to hold on,
to that feeling of cool, sweet delight
when after sun and salt and sand,
bucketfuls of dormant well water washed
our sun loved skin of freedom.

But the greed of a nation has swept
us all into the future of adulthood,
a land of money and progress,
of exiles and homesickness for
a place that no longer exists -
where I am left picking
imaginary tar from between my toes
left by those old South American ships.
©2007-2009 ~Danteholic
:icondanteholic:

Author's Comments

Remorse for future betrayals. I am sorry for what I will do, I hope You understand.

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:iconlalaland-faerie:
this is so so beautiful - you write really well and the images that this poem creates in my mind ('sandaled Sundays', 'feet of nostalgia';) are very original. :heart:

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when i grow up, i want to be that guy who sits behind the walls of toilet cubicles operating the automatic flushes!
:icondanteholic:
thanks alot!

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"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X
:iconbloodwitness:
I'm fascinated with the idea of nostalgia--Pablo Neruda and then Hayao Miyazaki (I don't come close)--and this is a lovely new perspective you've put on things. It sort of reminds me of myself, only better.

A slightly discrepancy I found: "our sun loved skin of freedom" sounds sort of like it washed the freedom out of your skin. I don't know if you want that.

Fantastic poem. :D
:iconshimoonwind:
I don't know what to say.
:icondanteholic:
:kiss:

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"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X
:icondanteholic:
mmm, I love Neruda. I am trying hard to read something other than Neruda, but there is no one quite like him. I shall see if the library has any Miyazaki.

Yes, I am trying to find a word to put before freedom, perhaps Dirty. We always washed before returning to civilazation, being dirty somehow set us free...

Glad you enjoyed it :) Thanks for your comments!

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"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X
:iconbloodwitness:
Miyazaki is a Japanese animator--he created such works as Princess Mononoke, Nausicaa of the Valley of the Wind and Spirited Away. While he may work predominantly as an animator, he is a fantastic storyteller.

Perhaps freedom is dirty, but it's the best kind of dirt. :]

You're welcome.
:icon0-hermit-0:
Very moving. I feel brought to tears by this.

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Well, it made sense at the time.
:icondanteholic:
thank you

--
"Let your words be fitting".
Inferno Canto X

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